Suzaku Seishi Fan Fiction Review: Dancer In The Night

Dancer In The Night
Author: Raye Johnsen
Email: raye_j@yahoo.com
Warnings: none.
Type: parody, AU, fairytale

Tasuki:
Bwahahahahah! I KNOW this story! Yeah! I heard it as a kid! Another Houki fic! *cheers*
Okay, first things first; when I first looked at this, I screamed and nearly fell backwards in my chair. Then after I had wiped the tears of pain from my eyes because of the BG color and could focus again, I enjoyed it. So, the point is, NO #$%&*^@ NEON BG's!
Now that THAT is out of the way, I didn't see any of the common errors, a plus! And it was fun! Though I don't know about marrying beneath my station...I'm a bandit! I mean, who could I marry that could drag me down? O_o
*hears a clacking bell* O_O I HAD to ask! *climbs on a chair to avoid Mits' goat*
I didn't find anything *kicks goat* wrong with this fic at all! Although -squeak!- Chiriko would be a bit young if *feeds goat a slipper* one of those questers chose him. It was rather *kicks goat again* imaginative and the "laurels" part made me snicker for -squeak!- some reason. It was a really *gets butted off the chair* cute fic! *slaps the goat* Would really like to see more Houki fics... *gets an uppercut from the goat, which is suddenly wearing a boxing glove, and crashes through another paper door*

Mitsukake:
What IS it with the goats? There was even mention of them in this fic! @_@ *sweatdrops at Tasuki's antics* Ooookaayyy...
Anyway, this was a great story based on a great fairy tale-ya don't see many of those, much less quality ones!
The whole thing...I'm not sure how in-depth I can go with the review. It just sort of blows the reader away! Original idea, great planning, clever characterization, excellent carrying-over of the original legend into the Four Gods Universe...What can one say, really, other than WAY TO GO!
One thing in the story grated on my nerves a bit, but since it wasn't really the author's fault I'll keep quiet. *twitch*

Chichiri:
I enjoyed this fic no da! I mean REALLY enjoyed this fic! I got totally lost in the tale, leaning over my keyboard with my chin in my hand, simply reading and engrossed in each sentence. Yes, I heard this tale too (even with the goat), years ago, but it has been so well intertwined with our characters it had taken on a fresh new look. All of us stayed well within character and the writing was smooth. (I do have to agree with Tasuki about the background color, it -was- a bit hard on the eye.)The ending was very well-done and it left the reader with a feeling of satisfaction that all was well and Houki recieved the reward she richly deserved no da. Old-fashioned happy endings, I do like them ^-^

Nuriko:
I think I'm the only one who hadn't heard this story before, although I had heard OF it... so when I read it, I was hearing the story for the very first time. Wonderfully done! Two Houki fics in one sitting, I think this is too good to be true! I think I especially liked the way that a lot of the characters were put into the fairytale. I can picture Subaru as the advice giver and possible gossip of the household, as well as Kouji as a royal guard.
I completely agree with Chichiri on this one. From the moment I started reading it, I was engrossed and couldn't turn away until it was done. The background was a bit bright, but even that was overlooked. If you do anymore fairy tales like this one, send them my way, onegai!
There was only one point I had a problem with... I'm not that sarcastic, am I? *Slants his gaze to each of the other seishi.* Well?

Hotohori:
Bright pink...*puts on a pair of sunglasses* Okay, now I'm ready to review this.
I must say that this fic is very well written. I don't believe that I spotted any grammar or punctuation mistakes, and the story flows along very well. The spelling and characterization was excellent as well. I have always liked this fairytale, from the first time I heard it when I was younger.
This is a nice retelling of the story, and you've done a very good job of setting it within the world of The Book of the Universe of the Four Gods.

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