Suzaku Seishi Fan Fiction Review: Fallen Destiny

Fallen Destiny
Author: AveryJ Nightingale
Email: tasuki-genro@home.com
Warnings: A LOT of cussing-well, it's Tasuki's ah...well, anyway, altered fic. A lot of cussing and a lot of reality in it. Lots of fighting and blood and guts, and a certain bandit using the restroom. Dunno what to rate that...? Can't scare the kids man! This story is 69 pages long, so it will be okay to have a bit be read, at least to the part of where the Seishi enter the scene around page 15. The whole story doesn't have to be reviewed, but there is a point at the end and a moral or final thought I suppose and then when it is read to the end, can we be enlightened to what type of fic it is.
Type: Well, it's a certain type of fic, but if I say that-it will spoil. It is an altered reality, an action, emotional twist and we get to see the emotionaly and mental side of Tasuki, his life and family and heart. ^^

Tasuki:
Hey! It was about ME! It was worth reading for that! Okay, the beginning was a bit long, making you antsy for the story to really start, and it was a bit descriptive, which was distracting, but other than that, it was really good! And I knew that f@#$*& chicken hated me! O_o
Anyway, it went deep into my character, and I thought it was well plotted and thought out. Good characterization and rather true to life. And I died in a cool way! *wipes a tear*

Chichiri:
Well, this is a very interesting fic with a different twist. It was planned very well and did give a bit of insight to a Tasuki-that-might-have-been (given a different road to take.)
The beginning -was- long and a bit confusing however, and there were just a couple of scenes that I felt didn't really belong and took just a little away from the story (Tasuki's relieving himself in the alley for one)
Overall, it's not a bad adventure fic. Say Tasuki, how does it feel to be the one to die for once no da? Heh heh.
I give it 3 kasas no da.

Tamahome:
Hmmm...
I have to admit I didn't read all of this fic. I personally find Avery's writing style to put my teeth on edge. Don't take that as an insult, Avery! I have exactly the same reaction to Marion Zimmer Bradley!
In an effort to be fair, I did read the first four chapters. It was interesting to say the least. No wonder our Firebaby likes it - he's the undisputed star. Tasuki fans will like it too.
I didn't read far enough in to encounter the SI that is Avery's trademark, but it was interesting to see Tasuki in that particular position. I didn't keep going to see how the end came out, though.
Of what I did read, it was technically very good. Grammar, spelling and punctuation all very clean. It was very Avery too.
All in all, I think this is a good fic. Avery fans will like it. Tasuki fans will like it. People who haven't encountered Avery's previous works *may* like it, and they should try it to find out if they will.

Nuriko:
I have to agree with Tasuki here, the beginning was a bit slow to get through, however the story did happen to catch my interest later on. I understand that Tasuki has a thing for language, however, with all the instances of it I saw, it has a tendency to detract from the reading of it.
I give it 3 kesas

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