Suzaku Seishi Fan Fiction Review: Longings of the Heart

Longings of the Heart
Author: Stormlight
Email: Riverfell_Den@hotmail.com
Warnings: Spoilers up until episode...five, I'd say, and from then on it goes into alternate reality. ^_^ There is a good dose of WAFF in this fic, so don't attempt to read if you have a weak stomach, are holding sharp objects, or are operating heavy machinery. ^_~
Type: Alternate reality, romance, slight drama. (Lots of angst, for Moonsong ^_~)

Nuriko:
*Smiles dreamily, re-reading the fic again* WAFF... definately. But it was so sweet, I couldn't stop myself from reading it. A couple of spelling errors, but I barely even noticed them, and this story did the one thing that I love. It caught me from the start.
The conversation between Miaka and Heika-sama at the beginning was touching, to say the least. It was amusing to watch the differences in speech... Hotohori's articulate nature and the 'high school' speech of Miaka. I could almost hear them talking in my mind.
And who knew Obake-chan was that insightful! I'm impressed, Tamahome. *grin* He's not stupid, and there are quite a few fics in which he's either played to be the dope, or there for muscle only... there's also quite a few where the infatuation with Miaka is enough to send me into sugar-shock. It was an excellent change of pace to see him able to be so understanding, and to care so much for her that he was willing to let her go.
This is one that put a smile on my face from the start and kept it there til the end. Well... except for one part.
'Her Royal Prissiness'??? *Sniffs faintly, crossing his arms over his chest.* I'm not THAT bad... am I?

Chichiri:
I've read several 'alternate stories' but I have to say this one is one of the best no da.
This is so tenderly done and the insights given in the conversations are very well done!
(I've often wondered how things would have turned out if Miaka had accepted Hotohori instead of Tamahome no da. Besides being in almost constant conflict with Nuriko of course. Just kidding Nuriko!!)
This took quite a bit of thought to produce and all in all a well-balanced romantic piece.
I give it 4 kasas no da!

Tasuki:
>.> WAFF...yeah, it was really WAFF. So, I'm a little out of my element here, but it was a good piece. Everyone was rather well in character, and everything was believable. It read just like Watase-sama might have written it if things had gone that way.
Y'know, in the beginning, I thought Miaka and Hotohori WERE a couple. But then, I hadn't met Baka yet. And after I DID, well, let's just say I didn't like Baka very #$&*(@ much!
This was an excellent fic, though it drug a bit for me. And it had one other problem. A big one. It was missing ME!! *crosses his arms and raises an eyebrow* I know this was supposed to be before my time, but spammit!
Ok, now that the major error was pointed out, I'd have to give this 4 whatevers as well!

Chiriko:
*looks carefully*
Well, first off, the formatting needs work, Stormlight-san. That color is absolutely horrid to read- it strained my eyes.
Anyway, no complaints about the writing itself. Stormlight is another writer who knows how to write, keeping fics fluid and well-paced. I'm just not a big Miaka/Hotohori fan.... well, Hotohori annoys me to START with, and when you throw a misguided Miaka in on top of it......
The Tamahome scene with Miaka was particularly well done.
No real problems, this just didn't grab me. 3 kasas.

Mitsukake:
From the technical point of view, this fic was *flawless*. I saw no grammar/spelling/funky neon background problems, and the dialogue was definitely in-character, for an alternate universe fic.
There was one problem, tho: if someone went through this fic and switched Hotohori's and Tamahome's names, some descriptive stuff, and changed 'empress' to plain old 'wife', we'd just have a replay of what DID happen. ("I love you, so I'll pour my heart out to you now." "I love you, but you're too good to be in love with me so I'll refuse you and act all heartless now." "I'll cry and run away and say that I hate you, even though I still secretly love you." "I'll decide to change the game plan and declare that I *do* love you, and beg your forgiveness." "I'll refuse to believe it because you're too good for me.", etc)
However, it's all forgivable because we weren't treated to endless recitations of the (modified) Unholy Chant: 'Miaka!' 'Hotohori!' 'Miaka!', and so on. *shudder* Do you people have any IDEA how much brain damage that can cause? @_@ However, because this fic *had* no Unholy Chanting, and because it made a little more sense than the original (the reject-forgive-reject cycle only happened once or twice), I say four kasas. ^_^

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