Obakekodomo
Author: Lady Shinnite
Email: seriyana@gurlmail.com
Warnings: none
Type: Drama

	Hotohori: I liked this. It was really short, but very sweet. A very nice companion piece to Sainokodomo. This is turning out to be an excellent series, Lady Shinnite. Keep up the good work, ne? I eagerly await the next part.
	Mitsukake: This story...should have a fluff warning. ^_- (This review is going to be rather short, simply because I don't remember the first fic in the series too well, and I'm too lazy to look for it. Speaking of that, a link to either the previous story or to the main page, at either the top or bottom of the story, would have been helpful. ^^;;) All was well in the spelling and grammar areas-which is GOOD. Regardless of what some might say, those two areas are every bit as important as the story itself. (Jeez, I'm starting to sound like Chiriko! ^_^) Storywise...slightly confusing, although character development fics can be nice. Like I said, lotta fluff here, works it's way into the third story pretty well, interesting read. :) Some minor paragraph-spacing errors, but nothing big. It's hard to pass judgement on a "story-bridge" fic, but all in all it's a worthwhile read. Are we gonna see the next one?
	Nuriko: *Smiles* I remember reading the first part of this series a while ago, and I remember wanting to see more back then! I'm so glad that this is being continued and I truly hope that the third part finds its way to us as well! This part is most definately fluff, but it's good fluff! A bit confusing if you haven't read the first part, however. Like M its said, there were a few errors here and there, but nothing that detracted form the story. The only problem I had was the first paragraph, it seemed a little bit choppy. Still... I can't wait to see the rest!
	Chichiri: I agree with Nuriko, a bit of a weak beginning but a good addition to the first story no da! So it's 'fluff'. Well I happen to like fluff, especially after reading some other story that has a bit of battle and blood in it no da. Fluff helps balance things out. I can see where it could be confusing if the reader hasn't read the previous tale, but it's shaping up to be a good series and I look forward to the next installment no da.
	Tamahome: I liked it. Short and sweet, a good combination. Nothing really stood out as being wrong. I didn't notice any spelling and grammer mistakes, which is always good. As everyone else is saying, a little fluffy, but fluff is nice. If you read enough you get to be real good at pleasing the girls. *glares at Tauski* Not one word, you hear! All in all, a good story.
	Tasuki: *lifts eyebrow* Ehh...good in the grammar and spelling department. But it seemed to be kinda...slow. >.> I guess it’s nice for fluff, but I didn’t see anything happen in this installment. I enjoyed the first part, but there didn’t really seem to be a point to this part, other than ‘Chiri angst. *scratches head* I gotta agree with Mits this must be a ‘story-bridge’ piece, and it’s hard to judge it without the first and last piece as well. *shrugs and *tosses the fic to Chiriko to review* I’ll be looking forward to the next part though!

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