Suzaku Seishi Fan Fiction Review: The Race Chap5-End

The Race--Chapters 5-End
Author: Stormlight
Email: Riverfell_Den@hotmail.com
Warnings: Spoilers for basically the whole series, and (slight) spoilers for the plot of Labyrinth, as well, although its more like what we Listians term a Visitation, and doesn't have much to do with the actual movie at all.
Type: This is a definite self-insertion. This is also a crossover with the movie, Labyrinth. This is also rather wierd. ^_^;
Crossover Info: Such a Sad Love

Chichiri:
When I saw this was the rest of that story sent in by Stormlight, I first made a nice pot of tea, then sat back and prepared myself for a very comfortable read of a very enjoyable fic. And I was -not- disappointed no da!
For as many chapters as this story has, the action does not lag at any of it. Each turn has unexpected bits and the conversations were quite amusing. (Although I'm not into action as is Tasuki, I did enjoy the fight scenes! And the part where Tasuki meets the Fieries was great! Come to think of it, he -Does- look like them, especially the one with the big mouth no da!)
The emotional bits were done quite well too, being sensitive without being overpowering or boring.
And Sir Didymus was not forgotten! Hurray no da!
There were only a few grammar mistakes that I noticed, mostly simple capitalizations that did not deter the storyline in any way. And the ending neatly wrapped everything up with no loose ends.
This is now one of my favorite fanfics no da! Good job and 5 kasas, Stormlight!

Tamahome:
Okay... I'm just reading this now, so I guess this'll go for the first parts of the series too.
I liked it. It was fun, and managed to keep the plot going without being bogged down anywhere. I have to admit that I have a deep-rooted dislike of self-insertation, even the 'comedy' type, so I had to overcome that, but once I did I enjoyed the story. This is now officially Tamahome's favorite self-insertation story. ^_- And Labyrinth is great, of course.
With that said... there were some mild grammar mistakes, like Chichiri said, but nothing blinding. My main problem with the story was the ending. It seemed to peter out somehow. Although Taiitsu-kun showing up to make things right does have some backing in the series, it felt a little strange here; too deus ex machina. Still, it wasn't enough to take away from the overall series.

Hotohori:
Stormlight-san, I love this fic, as I have said before. I honestly didn't mind the self-insertion in it, as it moves the story right along. You've portrayed the way the characters would interact with each other very well indeed. All in all, an excellent work, and certainly one of my favorite FY stories. 5 kasas, as the others say. *smiles*

Tasuki:
I’m glad to see this finished. The chapters seemed to whiz by, and it was over too soon, dammit! Mits getting turned into a bird! Bwahaha!! Mitsy want a cracker? *grins widely at the healer*
There was just enough action to keep me glued to this fic and Nuriko actually did something cool! I mean, I’m sure I’m just going to repeat what those guys said, so, basically, it was fun! Thumbs up for a good story! Though I have the eerie feeling those Fireies did seem to resemble certain people I AM related to. But they never threw their heads at folks. Threw things AT heads, though. Poor Squirt didn’t get much action though. Awww, too bad, so sad. *grins*
Now that you shown us this, if you think Goblin guy was a slavedriver... *grins evilly* Get crackin, Listian.

Nuriko:
*Glares at Tasuki* What do you mean I 'finally' did something cool?
Stormlight, I LOVED this fic immensely, and let me be one to say that if you ever write another crossover fic, LET ME KNOW! The pace was fast enough to keep interest, yet slow enough that nothing was confused. It had just the right mix of action, comedy, drama... (The Selkie Riddle is still one of my favourite scenes)
I have to give this one 5 kasas and THEN some. Write more!

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